Query Guru: Rearrange your paragraphs

Query & First Page Critique (Middle Grade Contemporary)

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It’s been awhile since I did a Query Guru post, and I don’t think I’ve ever done a middle grade one! Today we’ll look at both the query letter and the first page.

Both were submitted by a subscriber. If you would like a chance to receive feedback on your query letter and first page, fill out the following Query Guru form. (You do not have to be a paid subscriber to receive feedback, though you do have to be a paid subscriber to read the feedback I give to others — like the rest of this post.)

And, if you’re looking for a comprehensive guide to how to write the query letter in the first place, check out my in-depth post: How to Write a Stand-Out Query Letter.

Overall, today’s submission is really strong. I thought it would be helpful to point out what the author is doing well, along with what they can do to make this submission stand out from the crowd.