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Query Guru
Hello and welcome to another Query Guru post!
Today’s query letter works for the most part although, as is always the case with the queries I see, it could use a few more specific details, and maybe a little more explanation. And maybe something that really sets it apart from other thriller novels with similar themes.
My issue is not so much with the query. I think the query letter is enough to get an agent who likes thrillers and female rage to look at the pages. What I’m more concerned with is the first page. I don’t think it’s starting in the right place or in the right way, and I worry that’s what will stop an agent from requesting the full manuscript. I worry this first page is giving off vibes of “this manuscript isn’t ready yet.”
So much pressure on a first page! See all of my Fabulous First Pages posts for what a manuscript should try to accomplish on page 1.
And, by the way, if you’re looking for a comprehensive guide to how to write a query letter in the first place, check out my in-depth post: How to Write a Stand-Out Query Letter.
Anyway, let’s take a look at the query letter and first page and I’ll give some specific suggestions.
(Content warning: the first page contains a very brief mention of self-pleasure.)
The Query Letter:
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